Tied for so long
The invisible chains
Rattling and digging deep
They were all under my skin
Impossible separation
Of the mind and soul
The blindness and the faith
The naïveté of it all
The circle of feelings
Dizziness of the pace-
Come along stranger
Untie the blindfold
Pull me away
Into your surreal world
4 comments:
Beautifulll!!!
i double wat rakhee says...beautiful !!!
Hmm... Reads well. But could be better. Wait wait, this is constructive criticism. For example, try minimizing the use of articles and conjunctions. Your poem would then read:
Invisible chains
Tied so long
Rattling, digging deep
Under my skin
Impossible separation
Of mind and soul
Blindness and faith
The naïveté of it all
Feelings circle
At a dizzying pace-
Come along stranger
Untie the blindfold
Pull me away
Into your surreal world
Damn gud...didn't know you write...really nice!
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